I wrote the first draft of this poem twenty years ago, give or take a few months. Although I have sent it out many times, it never seems to have caught an editor’s attention. So, time to let it fly on its own here. Perhaps you will see some grace in it, or perhaps you will think the editors who rejected it correct in doing so. Either way, it now has its public home…
It’s a hastily made bed, not quite flat,
smooth, betraying a few small ripples:
glacial dump and curving river cuts that
punctuate lives while spheres—blue crystal—
harmonize desire’s cumulus curtains.
Golden legs brazenly stretch across
the quilted-bedspread pattern that’s certain
of its course, not contemplating loss.
The clouds grow in portent, rise with moisture.
Storms fly like a prophetic raven flock;
from them a striving white-water river
cuts all the way down into the bedrock.
Steering my mind over these rapids—in
a deep eddy I slip over, begin.
It could be the fact that it’s formal, combined with a conscious surrealistic-abstract expressionism. Or maybe it is just tired at the ripe age of 20+…
Michael, I’m going to have to come back and read this again and think it over. It doesn’t have the same energy or force that seems to be your signature in the more recent works I’ve read and I think that is distracting me.
It’s good to take older works out, dust them off, review again and put the out in the light.
Enjoyed the slideshow.
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